[原创]My best resdutions in coming year--[sakura][English Bar　英语氧吧]

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[原创]My best resdutions in coming year--[sakura]

My best resdutions in coming year

In the past year, my resdution was to get a good marks to went a good high school. Now the resdution is achieved. I felt very happy and in the coming year, I get a more higher resdution.

First is to get the high marks about nearly 700-750. Then is stay with my parents in the weekend. Last is to get a good health.

The first resdution I will try my best to do because I will tell everyone I’m not a loser, I can win the laurels by my hard working.

To stay with my parents is because of in this team, I also go out to study with my good friend and don’t have so many time to talk and concern them, so I think I need to have a time to stay with them.

This team I went to the hospital so many times. If I don’t have a good body, I can’t attend to study.

That’s all of my resdution in the coming year.

ωō軹х o..愛伱o┈ 有①种.︷.愛﹎叫做┈┼等待﹎o

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以下是引用Sakura在2007-12-22 17:07:15的发言：

My best resdutions（resolutions下面的都写错了） in coming year

In the past year, my resdution was to get a good marks to went a good high school. Now the resdution is achieved. I felt very happy and in the coming year, I get a ~~more~~ higher resdution.

First（我觉得你之前说你许了一个愿望就不用写first了） is to get the high marks about nearly 700-750. Then is （to)stay with my parents in the weekend(s). Last is to get a good health(y) body.

I will try my best to achieve the first resdution because I will tell everyone I’m not a loser, I can win the laurels by my hard working(怪怪的，是付出的意思吧，不妨用其他词吧）.

To stay with my parents is because of in（两个介词不可连用） this team, I also(always)go out to study with my good friend and don’t have so many(much,time为不可数名词，要用much.而非many )time to talk and concern them, so I think I need ~~to have a time~~ to stay with them.

This team I went to the hospital so many(much) times. If I don’t have a good body, I can’t attend to study(这个不太明白什么意思）.

That’s all of my resdution（s) in the coming year.

　　沙发｀｀｀｀｀｀只要我经常帮你看看作文，你一定会有一个好成绩的，加油，坚持上体育课身体都会好起来哦，呵，加油

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-12-22 17:26:34编辑过]

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以下是引用Sakura在2007-12-22 17:07:15的发言：

My best resolutions in coming year

In the past year, my resolution was to get a good marks to went to a good high school. Now the resolution is achieved. I felt very happy and in the coming year, I get a more higher resolution.

First is to get the high marks about nearly 700-750. Then is stay with my parents in the weekend. Last is to get a good health.

The first resolution I will try my best to do because I will tell everyone I’m not a loser, I can win the laurels by my hard working.

This team I went to the hospital so many times. If I don’t have a good body, I can’t attend to study.<what's the meaning?>

That’s all of my resolution in the coming year.

有时间的话,麻烦去帮我改改作文,好吗?谢谢.

http://english.xazx.net/bbs/dispbbs.asp?boardID=22&ID=6724&page=1

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-12-22 19:18:01编辑过]

???????????????//no pain,no gain

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attend to 是专心于，专心，认真的意思

不过不知道是不是语法有错误咯

last 谢谢你们的建议还有谢谢你们抽时间帮我改改作文啦

单词拼写我会多加注意的语法也会好好练习的

ωō軹х o..愛伱o┈ 有①种.︷.愛﹎叫做┈┼等待﹎o

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以下是引用Sakura在2007-12-22 17:07:15的发言：

My best resdutions(resolutions) in(for the) coming year

In the past year, my resdution was to get a good marks to went(go) a good high school. Now the resdution is achieved. I felt very happy and in the coming year, I get a more higher resdution.

First is to get the high marks about nearly 700-750. Then is stay with my parents in the weekend. Last is to get a good health.

The first resdution I will try my best to do because I will tell everyone I’m not a loser, I can win the laurels by my hard working.

This team I went to the hospital so many times. If I don’t have a good body, I can’t attend to study.

That’s all of my resdution in the coming year.